This story is about a woman mentally preparing herself to move to Boston for a new job. During her preparation, she has an anxiety attack and loses conception of time and (I think) hallucinates a vision of her mother telling her to wait to leave until the morning. It was unclear to me what exactly happened during the final page and a half of the story. Elements of magical realism seemed evident, but I am not sure what parts of the story actually happened and what parts didn’t.
This is a very fascinating and engaging draft driven by hard action. The story moves very quickly and really doesn’t let up until the final few paragraphs. I liked some of the details (the philosophy book and its contents, the six-hundred-thread-count sheets, the and the repeated acknowledgment of the time) wonder if they could be stronger or more pronounced in order to push the reader toward a more definitive conclusion of the story. It isn’t exactly clear to me what the significance of the time and how living in the moment corresponds with Danielle’s situation.
As a final note, what is the emotion that slips inside of her as she sets down the philosophy book? This is a key point in the story that is somewhat overlooked or at least understated. As a reader, I’m looking for a little more clarity on what this emotion is and why it’s so important, other than the fact that it causes the rest of the story to go where it does.
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