Critique: "Pretend Games"

E envies Tay, she wants what Tay has, but she doesn’t realize that Tay’s life is completely undesirable and that Tay wants what E has: semi-attentive, but still present guardians; hygiene; bath toys. I took pleasure in the presentation of this story. At times the language felt childlike. The cardoor was ‘seventy thousand pounds.’ At other times the language was technical and efficient. Signs ‘indicated potential danger’ (or didn’t). Injuries were ‘procured.’ Neither voice dominated, and it made me wonder why? What is it about E that we get both perspectives? I was a bit confused by the ending. I was rooting for E the entire way. I really wanted her to be the badass she wanted to be, but I’m left with giggly Tay, her character completely flipped on its head, and E unfulfilled. In other words, a whimsical, real story.